Sunday, April 1, 2012

Chris Fanfic Review No.5




Brief weeks 1- 5
FanFiction Review No. 5
Not Over You

This Fanfic has a very interesting start to it. i love how the writer explains the main characters, feelings towards a guy that she likes. it is showing alot of emotion which is very captivating. Overall i recommend others to read it, if you are interested in drama and love/hate relationships.   

Chris FanFic Review No.4



Brief weeks 1- 5
FanFiction Review No. 4
What Happens In Rosewood, Stays In Rosewood
First of all i would just like to stay that i am a huge pretty little liars fan myself, and had found this Fanfic intriguing. I like the way the writer put together the whole story and kept it simple. I'm happy that they stuck to the story line and made it more interesting. 

Chris FanFic Review No.3



Brief weeks 1- 5
FanFiction Review No. 3


I found that this fanfic of the television series Being Human, was very interesting but boring at sometimes. This story is basically explaining what has happened in one of the episodes from season 1. there were some bits that were changed but i did not see the point in changing those parts because they had nothing to do with the main story line.    

Chris Fanfic Review No.2



Brief weeks 1- 5
FanFiction Review No. 2

So i decided to read about one of my favorite shows when i was little. This Fanfic of Hannah Montana is the most crack up story i have ever read, like seriously if this was a real episode i think i would actually die of laughter, just imagining this is to much for me. I quite like it and found it entertaining, especially the part where they made Hannah seem like a Slut. 

Wonderland.


                                                           WONDERLAND

Alice hurled through the door and landed with a hard knock on the cold floor, the men walked in behind her. From the floor, she slowly lifted her head, her blurry eyes rose until his figure began to focus.
“The Mad Hatter” is what they call him. He sat still at the table. A fog of smoke glazed the room. From her bruised eyes she could just make out the giant top hat, hiding his heartless eyes. She could feel him watching her…

Alice
He spoke without moving. Her heart began to race.

“Did you really think you could escape from Wonderland…?”

This was not a question. No one had EVER escaped from Wonderland before. Once you came to Wonderland, your body didn’t belong to you anymore, it belonged to them. It belonged to Hatter.
Alice didn’t purposely find her way to Wonderland, unlike the other girls who came; young, addicted and desperate. Once a girl found herself in Wonderland, she became property –traded and prostituted at the will of Hatter. Their bodies used up and sold…To them it seemed a small price to pay for their fix. Reality so distorted by drugs they saw Wonderland as their sanctuary. Slaves to their own addictions.
Hatter used drugs as a tool, to keep order in Wonderland.
Shrinking Mushrooms to Potions, Tripping Teas, Pills, any and every kind of substance, each different but just as effective.
Or worst of all…the White Rabbit. White Rabbit lead you to a deep, dark hole, empty and evil. It was a drug so wicked the moment you inhaled the thick white poison, you became immortal, but cursed. Once you follow the path of the White Rabbit, there’s no going back, stop taking the drug and you will die. However even though the White Rabbit makes you live forever, it slowly turns you insane.

White Rabbit smoke released in thick, white circles from Hatter’s mouth.
He stood.
Alice’s breathing became heavy as he paced his way towards her, eyes still hidden by his hat. He stood before her face, Alice shut her eyes tight.

                                  *                              *                                     *

Two days earlier, Alice’s plan commenced.
She spent exactly one year devising this plan. It wasn’t just a plan of escape… It was a plan of total destruction.
Alice would bury the people responsible for trapping her in this prison of hell. She didn’t belong in Wonderland. She wasn’t like the other girls, in need of White Rabbit to live, willing to sell their souls to the Hatter himself to keep their miserable lives.
No. She came into Wonderland having lost everything she knew, desperately looking for a safe place. She was befriended by a man named Cheshire. He was kind to her, she trusted him and he promised her safety and a new beginning. She was tricked.
One year she had spent in the dirty cell behind Wonderland’s glamorous façade. One year of feeling cold and alone, forced to dress up in dolls clothes and dance for men more like creatures, who used her body and controlled her with drugs. But finally the time had come…and timing was everything.

                                  *                              *                                     *


Hatter bent towards her face. He grabbed her hair and twisted her neck until she was forced to look at him. She let out a shriek.
She looked into his eyes -bloodshot with madness, eyes which once long ago were a light green colour, were now black. His eyes shined at her but looked empty and hollow inside.
She diverted the gaze, Hatter’s eyes followed, then he noticed it; A golden brown colour, clenched in her fist. He grabbed it. Tea leaves, she had been trying to smuggle out of Wonderland with her. Tutt Tutt. 
 ‘Addicts’ he thought, Hatter smirked.

“Alice, Alice, Alice. Now what shall we do with you? Think we could escape from Wonderland did we? Must have lost your mind. Do you know what happens to people who lose their minds Alice?”

Behind the fog of thick smoke, Alice noticed the tiny clock quietly ticking on the wall in the corner.

“THEY. LOSE. THEIR. HEADS!” He threw her to the ground.

Hatter’s men struck into action. They pulled Alice to the table. One man grabbed an axe. Alice panicked but the man slammed her head on the table and held it there. She looked at the clock in the corner, 10 seconds to six…Right on time.
Hatter grabbed the rusty axe and held it above Alice’s bare neck. His smile was crooked, everyone knew more than well he took joy in what he was about to do. He lifted the blade taking aim… DONG! Interrupted! DONG! The clock bells rang. Hatter looked up, 6 O’clock?! Tea Time!
Hatter was surprised that he actually forgot, too caught up in the mess of catching Alice. One could NEVER be late for Tea. The men looked to Hatter slightly confused as to what to do next, Hatter looked at the men.

 “Tea Time!” he exclaimed.
“Suppose this can wait until after the Tea Party, think of this as your lucky day Alice”.

The men began to set up. Every 6 O’clock exactly, Hatter was pedantic that he and his men underwent the ritual of sipping on Tripping Tea and smoking to restore White Rabbit poison into their system. Hatter placed the Golden Brown Tea Leaves in the 5 spouted Teapot.
Alice took a deep breath. She waited.
As he poured the Tea a hum of noise arose as the men began to chat and snigger. Hatter glared at her, sipping his Tea, and she sat silently staring back at him.

Moments later a man began to choke, coughing and spluttering red blood all over the Tea Table. Then another! Clenching their throats, desperate for air and drowning in their own blood. Alice remained motionless, eyes fixed on Hatter’s now panic stricken face.
He dropped his cup.
“The Tea Leaves! You posioned the..” blood consumed his mouth.
With every powerless struggle, she watched him. She watched his eyes roll into the back of his head. She watched his convulsions on the floor, now blood stained. She watched him until his body became still with paralysis. He wasn’t dead yet, only lack of White Rabbit would truly kill him. But all in due time…

Alice picked up the axe off the table, she glanced at the clock. 6:15…Right on time. She walked over the unconscious bodies on the floor and made her way towards the door. Time to finish getting out of Wonderland… 



 

Holli FanFic Review 5

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7955785/1/Rum_and_Tea

This is another modern day Alice In Wonderland, this fanfic gives a great introduction and back story to the Alice character.
This fanfic was really gripping, especially the last few paragraphs where Alice is in the woods searching for her friend and the a rabit appears from the darkness.
Good quality writing, I was kept interested with a perfect amount of description and well established dialog between well defined characters.

Holli Fanfic Review 4

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5877655/1/The_Wonderland_Gang


Awesome fanfic which takes the approach of characters from Wonderland going into New York city. It is interesting the way the characters interact and discover things in our world, just as the origional Alice would have in Wonderland.

The writing and storyline is coherent and interesting and easy to understand with lots of description of setting and characters.

I like that it is modern day and quite dark, this is the approach I want to take for my fanfic.